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[mugenmine]

Stuck

Draft 5
Chapter 5 @  18063

Managed to get through most of chapter 5 this weekend. I'm down to 3 more pages but there needs to be some serious reworking done on those three and I just grew a bit tired. Balancing the transition between hesitation and agreement is still a bit up in the air, but with each pass I grow a little closer to what I want to say.  (words you not work so good!)

I'm feeling a bit of the "have I gotten worse" syndrome that was talked about in tumblr_refuge the other week. I feel this one is weaker than the ones that came before and I'm not sure how to fix it. Everything feels a little "white room syndromey" which is the problem of not giving a sense of the space. It might be because I'm writing about 221B and that in itself is a known entity, but not having the desciption of things on the page sometimes makes me feel like everything is a bit barren.  I know my style is simple prose but it all feels a bit too simple.

The read aloud cleanup round is helping a bit. I'm adding as I go to the spaces that feel a little thin and hopefully when I'm done it will be a bit thicker. I think I've been reading a bit too much of the lush prose lately and it's making me feel significantly "un-lush". But at the same time I kinda want to call it a day and kick the fucker out the door. I think that is an official stage in the writing process.

Hopefully I can finish up chapter 5 today and jump feet first into the final chapter 6 romp. That's always been the most together of the chapters so hopefully it won't be too painful.  Must finish soon. I'm aiming for 75% good for this one. A highish middling...

Comments

[coloredink.livejournal.com]

hahaha "white room syndrome," boy do I know that feeling well. I call it "people talking in space" myself, and it was especially a problem in my Sherlock fic, because, yeah, they mostly moved around in spaces that we were very familiar with.

For some reason writing Hannibal fanfiction has made my language very "lush." I think it's because the show itself has such florid dialogue and dramatic sets that it makes my language dramatic too. XD

[mugenmine.livejournal.com]

Oh yes definitely! Hannibal is such a lush palette to work with! I imagine the prose must be super fun to write. What you have to work with is so over the top and screaming for lush prose... Very cool indeed! That show really is quite visually magical... Did you ever watch any of his other stuff like Pushing Daisies or Dead Like Me?

[coloredink.livejournal.com]

You know, I keep restarting Dead Like Me, because for some reason I watch, like, six episodes and then stop for whatever reason, and when I restart I don't remember what happened, so I start from episode one again, and....yeah. XD I've only seen a couple episodes of Pushing Daisies. Come to think of it, he makes a lot of shows about death and dying???